The diagram below shows a simple system that turn dirty water into clean water. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.
The given figure depicts how to clean about 3 sections ( sand , charcoal , gravel ) and have both
water
through a simple system that Use synonyms
they
Correct pronoun usage
apply
turn
unclean Correct subject-verb agreement
turns
water
into clean Use synonyms
water
.
Use synonyms
Overall
, as it can be clearly seen Linking Words
that
in the diagram , there are 2 main stages in the whole process , starting from but Correct word choice
apply
water
in the filter assembly and ending with Use synonyms
produced
clean Wrong verb form
producing
water
it is ready to Use synonyms
drinke
.
In the first stage , they put Correct your spelling
drink
water
in the huge filterUse synonyms
Change preposition
with
plastic
lid and above storage drum . After that , the machines inside Correct article usage
a plastic
filter
started to clean Correct article usage
the filter
Use synonyms
water
. Afterwards, it is transferred to Correct article usage
the water
plastic
barrel .
In the final stage , Correct article usage
a plastic
water
Use synonyms
have
be ready and it can Wrong verb form
has to
use
in anything you want until drinksWrong verb form
be used
and
. Next , they send in supermarket and company .Correct word choice
apply
Also
, Linking Words
in
Change preposition
apply
any where
.Join the words
anywhere
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