The bar chart below show the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
The bar chart demonstrates the bonus range among genders from six different maturity groups in Australia doing regular physical activity in 2010.
Generally, the graph illustrates that, from their 25’s, women got the highest percentages
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exercising .
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, in the next maturity club, dropped their superiority with a decline of 0.3%. After, the percent
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