The line graph shows visits to and from the UK from 1979 to 1999. The bar chart shows the most popular countries visited by UK residents in 1999.

The line graph shows visits to and from the UK from 1979 to 1999.

The bar chart shows the most popular countries visited by UK residents in 1999.
The line graph illustrates
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the number
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of
UK
citizen
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citizens
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who had visited foreign countries
as well as
how many
visitors
had
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there were to
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UK
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the UK
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from other states between 1979 to 1999. The bar chart provides information about 5 top states visited by British
residents
in 1999.
Overall
, it can be seen that there was an increase in the number of
visitors
to and from the
UK
and there were more
visits
abroad by
UK
residents
than
visits
to the
UK
by overseas
residents
over the period.
Furthermore
, the most popular country to
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visit
by
UK
residents
was France in 1999.
According to
the line graph
in
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the
begining
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beginning
of the period about 10-12
milion
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million
UK
citizens
traveled
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travelled
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abroad and
then
rose steadily to 20
milion
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million
of
visitors
to
foreign
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a foreign
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country
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countries
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, before reaching the
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peak
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of over 50 million
visits
by
UK
residents
in 1999. In comparison to that
visits
to
UK
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the UK
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by overseas
residents
was
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were
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approximatelly
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approximately
10
millions
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million
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in 1979 and after that period experienced
slight
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a slight
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increase and
then
rose sharply to about 30
millionn
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million
visitors
in 1999.
Moreover
, France was the most preferred
destiantion
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destination
for
UK
residents
in 1999 followed by Spain,USA and Greece.
Meanwhile
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Turkey was the less attractive destination
choosen
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chosen
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to visit by British people.
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