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The line graph shows visits to and from the UK from 1979 to 1999. The bar chart shows the most popular countries visited by UK residents in 1999.

The line graph shows visits to and from the UK from 1979 to 1999. The bar chart shows the most popular countries visited by UK residents in 1999.
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The line graph illustrates
number
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the number
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 of
UK
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citizen
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citizens
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 who had visited foreign countries
as well as
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 how many
visitors
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had
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there were to
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UK
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the UK
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 from other states between 1979 to 1999. The bar chart provides information about 5 top states visited by British
residents
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 in 1999.
Overall
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, it can be seen that there was an increase in the number of
visitors
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 to and from the
UK
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 and there were more
visits
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 abroad by
UK
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residents
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 than
visits
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 to the
UK
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 by overseas
residents
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 over the period.
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, the most popular country to
ovisit
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visit
 by
UK
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residents
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 was France in 1999.
According to
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 the line graph
in
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at
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 the
begining
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beginning
 of the period about 10-12
milion
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million
UK
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 citizens
traveled
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travelled
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 abroad and
then
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 rose steadily to 20
milion
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million
 of
visitors
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 to
foreign
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a foreign
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country
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countries
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, before reaching the
pick
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peak
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 of over 50 million
visits
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 by
UK
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residents
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 in 1999. In comparison to that
visits
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 to
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UK
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the UK
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 by overseas
residents
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was
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were
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approximatelly
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approximately
 10
millions
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million
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 in 1979 and after that period experienced
slight
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a slight
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 increase and
then
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 rose sharply to about 30
millionn
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million
visitors
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 in 1999.
Moreover
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, France was the most preferred
destiantion
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destination
 for
UK
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residents
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 in 1999 followed by Spain,USA and Greece.
Meanwhile
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 Turkey was the less attractive destination
choosen
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chosen
choose
 to visit by British people.
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Change the sixth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words uk, visitors, residents, visits with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the sixth paragraph.
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