The line graph shows visits to and from the UK from 1979 to 1999. The bar chart shows the most popular countries visited by UK residents in 1999.
The line graph illustrates
number
of Change the article
a number
the number
UK
citizen
who had visited foreign countries Fix the agreement mistake
citizens
as well as
how many visitors
had
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there were to
UK
from other states between 1979 to 1999.
The bar chart provides information about 5 top states visited by British Correct article usage
the UK
residents
in 1999.
Overall
, it can be seen that there was an increase in the number of visitors
to and from the UK
and there were more visits
abroad by UK
residents
than visits
to the UK
by overseas residents
over the period.Furthermore
, the most popular country to ovisit
by Correct your spelling
visit
UK
residents
was France in 1999.
According to
the line graph in
the Change preposition
at
begining
of the period about 10-12 Correct your spelling
beginning
milion
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million
UK
citizens traveled
abroad and Change the spelling
travelled
then
rose steadily to 20 milion
of Correct your spelling
million
visitors
to foreign
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a foreign
country
, before reaching the Fix the agreement mistake
countries
pick
of over 50 million Correct your spelling
peak
visits
by UK
residents
in 1999.
In comparison to that visits
to UK
by overseas Correct article usage
the UK
residents
was
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were
approximatelly
10 Correct your spelling
approximately
millions
in 1979 and after that period experienced Change to singular
million
slight
increase and Add an article
a slight
then
rose sharply to about 30 millionn
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million
visitors
in 1999.
Moreover
, France was the most preferred destiantion
for Correct your spelling
destination
UK
residents
in 1999 followed by Spain,USA and Greece. Meanwhile
Turkey was the less attractive destination Add a comma
Meanwhile,
choosen
to visit by British people.Correct your spelling
chosen
choose
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