The bar chart shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2021. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2021.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar graph
discuss
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the statistics rank of the electricity amount produced and consumed by ten different
countries
in 2021.
Overall
,
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the unitaded
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unitaded
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united
states and
china
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China
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that
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apply
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are developing
countries
faced
the
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apply
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excessive
amount
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amounts
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in production and consumption
electricity
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of electricity
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in 2021 ,
while
other
coutries
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countries
are
very
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less,
that
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shows huge differences with considerable
gap
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.
In addition
, we can notice that there is no clear difference between producing and consuming electric
power
in the 10
countries
.
Marover
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Moreover
, the number
produces
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electricy
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electricity
for
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in
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US
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the US
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and
china
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China
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are nearly the same for 4099 and 5398 respectively .
On the other hand
, the quantity of
cosuming
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consumption
in these
countries
are
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3866 and 5322 for each of them .
In contrast
, the left eight
countries
have less electricity production and consumption that never
exceed
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1057 in producing
power
and no more than 1038 .
Further more
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, the lowest country was
korea
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in
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with
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485.1 producing
power
and 449.5 consuming
power
. We can note that all these eight
countries
faced
approximatly
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approximately
same
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the same
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numbers of production and
cosumption
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consumption
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • dual aspect
  • electricity production
  • electricity consumption
  • industrial base
  • population size
  • significant difference
  • surplus
  • deficit
  • electrical energy
  • ranking
  • economic patterns
  • industrial patterns
  • technological advancements
  • disparity
  • industrial development
  • economic capabilities
  • anomalies
  • export
  • import
  • energy efficiency
  • waste
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