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As a teacher you would like to take your students on field trip to a museum. Write a letter to the museum manager. In your letter: —Introduction yourself. —say what you are planning to do and why. —and finally ask for a discount

#teacher #students #field #trip #museum #manager #—introduction #—say #—and #discount
Dear Mr.Harry. I am writing to
request to
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 the
museum
 manager about
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condition
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.My name is Rose Miller.I am a teacher at a school 30.I teach
to
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students from history subject. As you know,as a teacher I would like to take my students on
field
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 trip to a
museum
.We are going
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 trip to a
museum
 with my pupils.The main reasons we travel.I am going to introduce to students historical memories at a
museum
.Because they learn more things through
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 a
museum
. I am going to ask about the discount from you.The discount is necessary and important for me. I hope you
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 me and you will contact me as soon as you
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. Thank you for your time.I look forward to hearing from you. Yours sincerely Rose Miller
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Introduction Clarity
Introduce yourself and your intentions clearly in the first paragraph to enhance clarity.
Detail Enrichment
Use more specific details about the trip, such as the educational benefits or the museum's exhibits, to strengthen your argument for a discount.
Organizational Structure
Consider organizing your letter into clear paragraphs, each with a single idea: introduction, purpose of the trip, request for discount, and conclusion.
Formal Closing
End with a formal closing statement to maintain the professional tone of the letter.
Introduction
You've successfully introduced yourself and stated the purpose of the letter.
Direct Request
The request for a discount is clear and directly addressed.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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