The graph below shows a comparison between the unemployment rate and the number of people leaving Ireland from 1988 to 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows a comparison between the unemployment rate and the number of people leaving Ireland from 1988 to 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph shows information about
correlation
Add an article
the correlation
show examples
of
Change preposition
between
show examples
the percentage of
people
without
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
work and the number of
people
, who left Ireland, over a twenty-year period between 1988 and 2008.
Overall
, what stands out from the graph is that
maximum
Correct article usage
the maximum
show examples
points for both considered categories were in 1988, and the number of fluctuations led to the almost lowest
percent
Replace the word
percentage
show examples
of citizens with no work
at
Change preposition
in
show examples
the
last
year on the graph. Looking at the details, as regards the unemployment curve, there was a sharp fall from 17% to around 12% in 1990 and
subsequent
Correct article usage
a subsequent
show examples
rise to approximately 15% in 1992.
After
this
point
Add a comma
point,
show examples
the line declined steadily until it gained its minimum of around 5% in 2004.
Then
the
slightly
Change the adverb
slight
show examples
rise finished the analysis of the rate at 6%. If we look at the line which
is describing
Wrong verb form
describes
show examples
another
Correct quantifier usage
other
show examples
information, the trend was almost similar till 2004, with
sharp
Add an article
a sharp
the sharp
show examples
drop from around 65,000 in 1988 to 35,000
people
in 1992.
Then
after several variations, which lasted for 10 years, there was a significant increase in the number of
people
leaving Ireland,
that
Correct pronoun usage
which
show examples
reached approximately 55,000 in 2008.
Submitted by pusheen.sveta on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Vocabulary: Replace the words people with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.

Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+

Learn how to write high-scoring essays with powerful words.
Download Free PDF and start improving you writing skills today!
What to do next:
Look at other essays: