The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
The bar graph indicates the amount of Australian
males
and females in percentage in various age
groups based on their regular physical activity in The year 2010.
Overall
, the number of females doing regular physical exercise in Australia was higher than males
in all age
groups, except group
15 to 24. The least difference in percentage of their exercise routine could be seen in Fix the agreement mistake
groups
age
group
65 and over, and on the
contrary
the greatest one was in Add a comma
contrary,
group
35 to 44.
As can be seen, in 2010 in Australia, in the age
group
25-34, just above 42 percent
of men had a regular exercise plan, Change the spelling
per cent
while
women outnumbered them by almost 49%. Subsequently
, for 35 to 44, these numbers were 39.5 and 52.5 percent
respectively. In Change the spelling
per cent
age
Add an article
the age
group
45-54 female participants went for 53.3%, while
males
were there for 43.1%. In 55
-64 Correct article usage
the 55
group
as well the number of women was higher than men by near
8%.
Change the word
nearly
Additionally
, The percentage of men exercising regularly in age
group
65 and over was 46.7%, which was almost the same as the number of women in that category that
was 47.1%. Correct pronoun usage
which
age
group
15-24 was the only classification, in which, the amount
of Change the quantifier
number
males
engaged in physical activity outnumbered females by almost 5 percent
.Change the spelling
per cent
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