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he line graph show the amount of shop closures and openings in a particular nation from 2011 to 2018.

he line graph show the amount of shop closures and openings in a particular nation from 2011 to 2018.
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Contained in the line graph is information pertaining to the amount of shop closures and openings in a particular nation from 2011 to 2018.
Overall
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, it can be observed that both closures and openings witnessed a downtrend trajectory.
Additionally
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, the number of closed
shops
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 was always higher than
shops
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 that opened, with the exception of 2011 and 2015. Taking closely at the closure of
shops
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, it is evident that it reached a peak in 2013
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 hitting to dip in the next two years. Beginning with 2011, when the number of
shops
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 that closed stood at approximately 6,500 before increasing to around 7,100 in 2013.
This
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 was followed by a sharp decline from around 6,500 in 2014 to just over 600 in 2015.
Subsequently
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,
this
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 figure surged to around 5,100 in the final year of the timeframe. Moving on to the figure of opening
shops
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, it commenced with nearly 8,500
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 experienced a downward trend to approximately half with 4000 in 2012.
In contrast
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, it was followed by an increase to 6,200 in 2014 after that
this
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 figure saw a decrease and accounted for 3000
at the end
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 of the period.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 90%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words shops with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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