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The three pie charts show the proportion of four kinds of vehicles used in the UK in 1996, 1985 and 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the man features and make comparisons where relevant.

The three pie charts show the proportion of four kinds of vehicles used in the UK in 1996, 1985 and 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the man features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The three pie charts represent the proportion of four different kinds of
vehicles
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 used in the UK: recreational
vehicles
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, public
transport
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,
lorries
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 and
others
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, and private
cars
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, indicated by percentages in 1965, 1985,
2005
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and 2005
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.
Overall
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, it can be clearly observed that the number of British people using personal
cars
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account
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accounts
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 for the largest portion,
whereas
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 that of those who
driving
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drive
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 recreational
vehicles
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take
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takes
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 the
fewest
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lowest
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 ratio in
three
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the three
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 aforementioned time
frame
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frames
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.
To begin
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 with, in 1965 at 40% private
cars
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was
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were
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 the highest among
other type
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another type
other types
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 of
vehicles
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, followed by public
transport
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,
lorries
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 and
others
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, and recreational
vehicles
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, at 25%, at 20%, and
at
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apply
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15%, respectively.
Hence
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, in the next two decades,
although
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 majority of British
peoples
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people
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 drove their
car
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cars
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 at 55%,
while
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 that of public
transport
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 and recreational
vehicals
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vehicles
 dropped around 5-10%.
Moreover
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, it is
ineteresting
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interesting
 to note that the number of
lorries
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 and
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others
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other
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 drivers remained the same. In regards
with
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to
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, in 2005, Private
cars
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 have the biggest portion at 60%,
whereas
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 the
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others
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other
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 three
vehicles
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 account
only
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for only
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 40% in total. Commuters with public
transport
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 and recreational
vehicles
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 rose about 2-3%,
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lorries
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and lorries
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 and
others
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 fell half of
its
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their
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 past figure at 10%.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 88%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words vehicles, transport, lorries, others, cars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "proportion" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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