The three pie charts show the proportion of four kinds of vehicles used in the UK in 1996, 1985 and 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the man features and make comparisons where relevant.

The three pie charts show the proportion of four kinds of vehicles used in the UK in 1996, 1985 and 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the man features and make comparisons where relevant.
The three pie charts represent the proportion of four different kinds of
vehicles
used in the UK: recreational
vehicles
, public
transport
,
lorries
and
others
, and private
cars
, indicated by percentages in 1965, 1985,
2005
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and 2005
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.
Overall
, it can be clearly observed that the number of British people using personal
cars
account
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accounts
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for the largest portion,
whereas
that of those who
driving
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drive
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recreational
vehicles
take
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takes
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the
fewest
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lowest
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ratio in
three
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the three
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aforementioned time
frame
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frames
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.
To begin
with, in 1965 at 40% private
cars
was
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were
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the highest among
other type
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another type
other types
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of
vehicles
, followed by public
transport
,
lorries
and
others
, and recreational
vehicles
, at 25%, at 20%, and
at
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apply
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15%, respectively.
Hence
, in the next two decades,
although
majority of British
peoples
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people
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drove their
car
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cars
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at 55%,
while
that of public
transport
and recreational
vehicals
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vehicles
dropped around 5-10%.
Moreover
, it is
ineteresting
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interesting
to note that the number of
lorries
and
others
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other
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drivers remained the same. In regards
with
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to
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, in 2005, Private
cars
have the biggest portion at 60%,
whereas
the
others
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other
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three
vehicles
account
only
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for only
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40% in total. Commuters with public
transport
and recreational
vehicles
rose about 2-3%,
lorries
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and lorries
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and
others
fell half of
its
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their
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past figure at 10%.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 88%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words vehicles, transport, lorries, others, cars with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "proportion" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.

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