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The graph below shows the percentage of workers from five different European countries that were absent for a day or more due to illness from 1991 to 2001. Summarise the information by selecting reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the percentage of workers from five different European countries that were absent for a day or more due to illness from 1991 to 2001. Summarise the information by selecting reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given line chart illustrates the proportion of
workers
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 from five different countries in Europe ( Netherlands, France, Sweden, UK, Germany) that were not present for a day or more
due to
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 sickness between 1991 and 2001.
Firstly
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, in Germany & the UK, the amount of
workers
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 being sick was in a stable position, starting
with
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at
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 below (3% & 2%) respectively. During the whole period (1991-2001) there were minor fluctuations.
Whereas
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 Sweden began with 3% of being sick among
workers
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 and it was in a more or less stable position till 1995. After 1995, the percentage of sick
workers
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 escalated significantly and ended up at over 4.5% in 2001.
On the other hand
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, in France & the Netherlands amount of
workers
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 who suffered from illness was quite high (5%, 4.8%) compared to other countries.
However
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, after 1993, France faced a slight decrease and it reached 3% in 1996. Afterwards, the numbers remained unchanged.
Subsequently
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, in
Netherlands
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the Netherlands
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, the number of sick corps fluctuated. At
first,
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in 1991 the rate was quite high (4.8%).
Finally
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, it ended with over 5 %.
To sum up
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, in the UK & Germany the level of sickness among
workers
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 was quite low and stabilised.
On the contrary
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, the other three countries suffered from some fluctuations.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words workers with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuations" was used 3 times.
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