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The three pie charts compare the composition of four different meals, namely breakfast, dinner, lunch and snacks, in terms of three nutrients, namely sodium, saturated fat and added sugar.

The three pie charts compare the composition of four different meals, namely breakfast, dinner, lunch and snacks, in terms of three nutrients, namely sodium, saturated fat and added sugar.
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The diagram illustrated the proportion of the daily
intake
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 of sodium, saturated fat and added sugar of each US
people
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person
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 in every single meal and in
snacks
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. For sodium
intake
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, it is shown that
dinner
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 has the highest proportion.
Dinner
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 is
comparativley
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comparatively
 highest among
breakfast
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,
lunch
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 and
snacks
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, with 43 per
cent
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. It is three times that
in
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at
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breakfast
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 and that
in
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at
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lunch
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.
Lunch
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 is the second highest with a double than that in
breakfast
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 and that in
lunch
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while
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breakfast
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 and
snacks
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 are the least, sharing the same
percentage
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, 14 per
cent
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. For the consumption of saturated fat,
dinner
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is
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also
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 contained the highest
percentage
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 among others, with 37 per
cent
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. The second highest
in
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percentage
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 is
also
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 in
lunch
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.
However
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,
snacks
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 are found to have more saturated fat than that in
berakfast
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breakfast
. For the
intake
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 of added sugar,
snacks
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 have nearly half of the
percentage
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, 42 per
cent
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.
Dinner
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 comes after with only half of that in
snacks
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.
Breakfast
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 and
lunch
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 have
the
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a
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 similar
percentage
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in
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of
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the
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apply
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added sugar
intake
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 with
lunch
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 having
slightly
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a slightly
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 higher
percentage
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, 19 per
cent
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. All in all,
dinner
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 is comparatively having a high
comsumption
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consumption
in
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of
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the
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apply
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nutrients which could be unhealthy if
exessively
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excessively
 taken, especially for sodium and saturated fat.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words intake, snacks, dinner, breakfast, lunch, cent, percentage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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