The three pie charts compare the composition of four different meals, namely breakfast, dinner, lunch and snacks, in terms of three nutrients, namely sodium, saturated fat and added sugar.

The three pie charts compare the composition of four different meals, namely breakfast, dinner, lunch and snacks, in terms of three nutrients, namely sodium, saturated fat and added sugar.
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The diagram illustrated the proportion of the daily
intake
of sodium, saturated fat and added sugar of each US
people
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in every single meal and in
snacks
. For sodium
intake
, it is shown that
dinner
has the highest proportion.
Dinner
is
comparativley
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comparatively
highest among
breakfast
,
lunch
and
snacks
, with 43 per
cent
. It is three times that
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breakfast
and that
in
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lunch
.
Lunch
is the second highest with a double than that in
breakfast
and that in
lunch
while
breakfast
and
snacks
are the least, sharing the same
percentage
, 14 per
cent
. For the consumption of saturated fat,
dinner
is
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also
contained the highest
percentage
among others, with 37 per
cent
. The second highest
in
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percentage
is
also
in
lunch
.
However
,
snacks
are found to have more saturated fat than that in
berakfast
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breakfast
. For the
intake
of added sugar,
snacks
have nearly half of the
percentage
, 42 per
cent
.
Dinner
comes after with only half of that in
snacks
.
Breakfast
and
lunch
have
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similar
percentage
in
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the
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added sugar
intake
with
lunch
having
slightly
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higher
percentage
, 19 per
cent
. All in all,
dinner
is comparatively having a high
comsumption
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consumption
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the
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nutrients which could be unhealthy if
exessively
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excessively
taken, especially for sodium and saturated fat.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words intake, snacks, dinner, breakfast, lunch, cent, percentage with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 6 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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