Today more and more people want things instantly (eg. goods , services , news ) Why is this ? It is positve or negative development?
News
along with
goods are increasingly needed to delivery
in little or no Replace the word
deliver
time
. The writer believes this
roots from the undesired to
wait and has Fix the infinitive
apply
positive
impact on human society as it improves current technology.
It must be understood that the Add an article
a positive
time
requirement for service is more and more shorter and even instant
Correct quantifier usage
more instant
due to
impatience to wait. To explain plainly, people of contemporary society have several leisure activities which are enlarged when humans get aged although
the time
budget is still 24 hours a day on account of better accessibility. As a result
, human being
Fix the agreement mistake
beings
has
to arrange a schedule with Wrong verb form
have
scarcity
of Add an article
the scarcity
a scarcity
time
for each interests
, forcing waiting for certain needs Change to a singular noun
interest
become
an exclusive feature of people’s lives. Take Vietnam as a typical example, a survey found that 90% of customers of Shopee, an online shopping Fix the infinitive
to become
web
, will choose a type of transportation that has less delivery Correct your spelling
website
time
even if it is not cost effective
.
One of the core benefits of Add a hyphen
cost-effective
this
trend is that technology has an opportunity to thrive. That due
to the fact that as humanity wants more items and utilities to be served immediately, trucks, Add a missing verb
is due
for instance
, need to has
adept combustion engines and satellite navigation Change the verb
have
system
to travel faster and information providers Fix the agreement mistake
systems
has
to update their Correct subject-verb agreement
have
system
to receive and transmit data Fix the agreement mistake
systems
in
an extraordinary rate.
In conclusion, the demand Change preposition
at
of
Change preposition
for
the
shorter Correct article usage
a
time
in terms of transmission and transporting of the present community stems from the current expectation of short waiting,
and will improve Remove the comma
apply
human’s
technology in both speed and quality.Change noun form
human
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Idea Development
Consider expanding on how the need for instant services affects society beyond technological advancements, perhaps exploring social, economic, or psychological impacts.
Example Specificity
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Logical Flow
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Grammar & Style
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Introduction/Conclusion
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Example Use
Good job including an example to support your argument, although more specificity could further strengthen your point.
Understanding
You've demonstrated an understanding of the question by acknowledging both the cause and impact of the trend toward immediacy.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite