Some university students wan to learn about other subjects in addition to their main subjects. Others believe it is more important to give all their time and attention to studying for a qualification. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Some

students

studying at higher

level

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in university may feel like looking into studying other

subjects

as an addition to their main

subjects

of focus.

On the contrary

, others argue that it is crucial to dedicate the entirety of their

time

and efforts to studying for a certain qualification at

this

level

. Personally, I would argue that those studying at university should aim to study several

subjects

as

this

equips them with transferable skills, which can be very useful in a work environment.  One clear advantage of studying several

subjects

is that

this

gives them the ability to widen their range of skills or even help them

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new, useful and applicable information. In

further

education, it is almost certain that young people will be able to choose to pursue studying a language (

for example

, a foreign language to the country they are based in) or a field which

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facets of numeracy (universities tend to offer economics, mathematic either of these classes ).

This

will

therefore

give them a

further

breadth of abilities and capacities

in addition

to their existing classes, which

otherwise

they might not have the

time

to

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in owing to their already limited existing

time

, because higher education institutions are notorious for their demanding nature.

For instance

, my friend who

studies

economics at UPenn

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,

in addition

to his current

studies

also

takes remedial Spanish and French lessons.

Hence

, I concur that focusing on multiple disciplines is crucial in expanding

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knowledge of

students

in spite of the fact that it takes a big proportion of their

time

. Others may argue

however

that focusing solely on a single qualification will ensure better academic outcomes

pupils

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at higher

level

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. By

following

this

suit, it is more likely

students

will have more free

time

, both for academic but

also

for leisure purposes.

This

could permit them to discover new hobbies, interests, and preferences. With

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free

time

,

students

are capable of studying more frequently, which could boost their academic performance as clearly they can invest more

time

and dedicate their efforts

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studying what they find to be truly interesting.

For example

, my sister who

studies

chemical engineering, had to halt her

studies

in French because of the large burden

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it put not only on her academics

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but

also

on her life-work balance.

Therefore

, it's undeniable that choosing to study a single field gives for greater

oppprtunities

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opportunities

for a more enjoyable student life, as opposed to trying to

desparately

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desperately

cover multiple

studies

at once. In conclusion, I would argue that those fulfilling their

studies

at

higher

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level

should seek

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to cover multiple

subjects

on the grounds that it provides them with a vast range of skills.

This

will

subsequently

ensure their long-term success in employment prospects.