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The chart shows the percentage of people in one country, by age group, who visited one or more museums in 2006, 2011 and 2016. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart shows the percentage of people in one country, by age group, who visited one or more museums in 2006, 2011 and 2016. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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This
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 bar chart represents a proportion of individuals of different
age
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 groups in a country who visited a few museums in the period of 2006, 2011 and 2016.
Firstly
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, throughout the
years
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 2006, 2011 and 2016, there was a significant increase in the percentage of people aged 25-34
years
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 who visited the
museum
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, the attendance rose from slightly above 25% to 33%.
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, the
age
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 group of 35-44
years
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 old saw the same increment which skyrocketed from 20% in 2006 to 30% and 36% in 2011 and 2016 respectively.
In contrast
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, citizens aged 55-64 showed little interest in
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 visitation which showed a decline in attendance from 40% in 2006 to 30% in 2016.
Additionally
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, The highest
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 group of people that saw the
museum
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 was in the year 2006, with 40% of citizens aged 55-64, followed by 35-44
years
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 of
age
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 which saw a visitation percentage of 38% in the year 2016.
However
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, the lowest
age
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 group was seen in 2011 which was recorded to be a little below 20%.
To conclude
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, it has been shown that people aged 25-34 were more interested in seeing the
museum
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 compared to individuals aged 55-64
years
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 who showed a reduction in
museum
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 attendance as the
years
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 went by.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, years, museum with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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