The charts below show the percentage of water used for different puposes in six areas of the world. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The charts below show the percentage of water used for different puposes in six areas of the world. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
The six pie charts compare the
use
of
water
for various
purposes
in different areas around the world. From the given figures it can be seen that
water
used for agricultural
purposes
is making the
greastest
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greatest
part out of all
while
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propotion
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proportion
of
water
used for domestic
use
is less.
Overall
, it can be seen that in Africa, Central
Asia
and South East
Asia
more than 80 per
cent
of
water
is used by farmers for agricultural land, South
America
consuming about 71% for agricultural
purposes
while
on the other hand
usage of
water
for agriculture purpose in North
America
and
Europe
is just 39 and 32 per
cent
. In regard
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industridal
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industrial
use
North
America
and
Europe
are using
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48 per
cent
and 53 per
cent
of
water
which shows there are a lot of industries in these countries,
rest
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of
four
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countries have less than 10 per
cent
water
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consumption in regard to industrial
use
.
Furthermore
, South
America
is using
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uses
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19%
water
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of water
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as
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for
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domestic
purpose
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purposes
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. Central
Asia
and South East
Asia
both
are consuming
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7 per
cent
water
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of water
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for domestic
purposes
. North
America
and
Europe
is
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consuming 13 per
cent
and
Europe
is using 15 per
cent
.
To conclude
, it can be seen that most of
water
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consumed is
by
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for
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industrial
purpose
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purposes
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and agricultural
puropse
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purpose
purposes
.
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Basic structure: Change the sixth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words use, water, purposes, asia, cent, america, europe with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the sixth paragraph.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • charts
  • percentage
  • water usage
  • regions
  • North America
  • Europe
  • Africa
  • Asia
  • Oceania
  • South America
  • agriculture
  • industrial usage
  • domestic use
  • significant differences
  • contributor
  • proportion
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