The diagram shows the stages involved in the process of making leather goods
The images illustrate how the products,
such
as bags, shoes, and balls, are prepared using animal fur.
Overall
, by looking at the whole diagram, the total non-cyclic process consists of 11 stages starting from drying animal coating and ending with making the products, such
as bags, shoes, and balls.
In the initial stages of the process, the animal skin
is dried, and it then
is taken to a nearby factory by lorry. In the next step, the taken skin
is washed with a mix of water and lime after which, it is soaked with lime. Subsequently
, the skin
is flattened by a specific machine, before soaking with a mix of water and tannin vegetable matter.
When it comes to the next ones, the soaked skin
is polished to remove impurities by a particular machine, thereby being taken to a factory. Finally
, the products, such
as bags and shoes are made of the taken
coating in the factory.Verb problem
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