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The bar chart below shows shares of expenditures for five major categories in United States, Canada, the United Kingdom, and Japan in the year 2009.

The bar chart below shows shares of expenditures for five major categories in United States, Canada, the United Kingdom, and Japan in the year 2009.
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The bar chart provides information about expenses for different living costs
break
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 down into 5 main categories (
food
, housing,
transport
, health
care
 and clothing) in four different countries in 2009.
Overall
 it can be seen that
,
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 all four countries spent much more money
for
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on
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accomodation
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accommodation
, daily
food
 and
transport
,
while
spent
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 less
for
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on
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 clothing and medical
care
. In 2009 about 25% of people from
United
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the United
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 States
were spend
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spent
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 their
moneys
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money
amounts of money
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for
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on
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 house expenses which is the
higher
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highest
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 percentage of
expenditute
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expenditure
expenditures
 for the whole period and between 5
mai
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main
 categories, followed by
UK
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the UK
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, Japan and Canada. Approximately 23% of the population in Japan spent their wages on
food
 and about 20% of them
for
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on
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transport
. Meanwhile
UK
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the UK
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were
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spent
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 about 20% spending on eat and 15% on mobility, followed by Canada
14
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with 14
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% on
food
 and 20%
of
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on
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transport
, not
at
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least
USA
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the USA
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 with
lowest
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the lowest
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 % of spending on
food
 and about 17% on
transport
.
Furthermore
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 two of the 5 main categories, which are medical
care
 and clothing experienced less expenses during the year for all
of
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four countries as spending on health
care
 was incredibly
lower
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words food, transport, care with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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