The graph compares employment rates in three sectors of the economy in the UK, 2000-2010 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparions where relevant.

The graph compares employment rates in three sectors of the economy in the UK, 2000-2010

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparions where relevant.
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The provided line chart illustrates employment proportion in public
sector
, private
sector
, and self-employed throughout the decade from 2000 to 2010.
Overall
, what stands out is
although
private static was outnumbered the others by a noticeable margin, the static was in the
last
place
at the end
.
To begin
, the private
sector
rate
has
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decreased gradually
at
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in
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the first three years before it levelled out for a single year. After 2003, the ratio nosedived over the rest of the period, apart from a significant drop in 2009, and reached almost 20% in 2010. In terms of those in
public
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sector
,
although
the proportion remained without a remarkable change until 2003, the statics escalated substantially and became roughly 50%.
In addition
, the rate
has
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dipped before it hit a peak at approximately 51
percent
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. Meanwhile, Self-employed's line was fluctuating. The line increased
moderatly
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moderately
over the interval and reached around 30%
at the end
.
However
, there was a considerable decrease and an increase between 2002 and 2005.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "although, at the end".
Vocabulary: Replace the words sector with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "static" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • employment rates
  • economy
  • sectors
  • agriculture
  • manufacturing
  • services
  • trends
  • increases
  • decreases
  • comparison
  • highest
  • lowest
  • economic policies
  • technological advancements
  • global market demands
  • patterns
  • decade
  • significant changes
  • abrupt changes
  • stability
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