Many countries raise fuel prices in order to deal successfully with problems pertaining to traffic and pollution. What effects do you think this move can have? What other measures do you think can be taken to reduce traffic and pollution?

World has been suffering
with
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the burning issue of
traffic
congestion and its
deterimetal
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detrimental
effects on the environment. As a part of
solution
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, certain nations have increased
fuel
rates.
However
, I personally hold a belief that the higher
fuel
cost can not be a solution
insead
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instead
it enhancing unnecessary financial burden among
people
. Regarding that, I
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Government can impose other
fuel
alternatives to deal with the
traffic
concerns.
To begin
with, If the
fuel
prices
raised
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by the authorities to tackle
with
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traffic
issues,
people
have to empty their pockets to commute from one place to another
that
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contributes
in
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developing the
econimical
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economical
economic
stress among them.
Additionally
, because of lacking of public transportation facilities, they don't have any other
alteranatives
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alternatives
alternative
for transportation which
make
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them
force
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to rely on private
vehicals
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vehicles
.
Thus
, no matter how much the cost of the
fuel
, they have to purchase it which significantly
affect
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their mental health by boosting
thier
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their
financial stress level. To cite an example, a recent survey reveals that, in 2018,
Indian
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government
had
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increasesed
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increased
the
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petrol prices to
reduces
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reduce
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the
numner
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number
of private
vehicals
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vehicles
on the road.
Surprisigly
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Surprisingly
, the number of
vehicals
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vehicles
remained same but the 75% of folks were
facinging
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facing
financial
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crisis
as a result
of
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a spike
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in
petrol
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the petrol
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rate. Talking about the alternatives to control
traffic
and pollution,
government
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the government
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should enhance the facilities of
the
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public
transportaion
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transportation
. In
perticular
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particular
, it has been evident that a large number of
emplyees
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employees
living
in
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the country
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country side
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are opting
private
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for private
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cars to commute to the office as there are no buses in their area. To tackle
this
,
a
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frequency of buses
as well as
the number of bus routes should be
increase
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by national leaders. Because, if it is convenient for
people
to catch the buses
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their desired time, it will eliminate the need
of purchasing
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to purchase
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private
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a private
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vehicle.
For instance
,
majority
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of
people
in
UK
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the UK
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which is
reknown
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known
renown
for its excellent public
trasportation
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transportation
services do not buy individual cars to commute.
To conclude
, making the
fuel
prices high
become
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a major contributory factor in hiking the stress level among
public
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the public
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rather than helping in
traffic
deduction and decreasing
pollusion
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pollution
.
Therefore
, adopting
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alternatives
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such
as advancing the bus transportation services can become a powerful remedy.
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There are several spelling errors in the essay. For instance, 'deterimetal' should be 'detrimental', 'econimical' should be 'economical', 'althought' should be 'although', 'facinating' should be 'fascinating', and 'vehicals' should be 'vehicles'. It's important to proofread your work to avoid these mistakes.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • 1. Renewable energy
  • 2. Fuel-efficient
  • 3. Congestion
  • 4. Low-emission vehicles
  • 5. Non-motorized transport
  • 6. Technological advancements
  • 7. Economic burden
  • 8. Subsidies
  • 9. Tax incentives
  • 10. Public transportation infrastructure
  • 11. Dedicated cycling lanes
  • 12. Pedestrian pathways
  • 13. Congestion charges
  • 14. Remote working
  • 15. Green urban planning
  • 16. Mixed-use areas
  • 17. Higher-density living
  • 18. Investment
  • 19. Alternative energy sources
  • 20. Environmental impact
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