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The charts below show the propotions of british, students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the propotions of british, students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The supplied pie charts
gives
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 information about the number of British
students
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 at a university in the United Kingdom who could speak other languages
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 to their mother tongue over a
ten year
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 period. A glance at the charts
reveal
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 that Spanish
language
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 was among the most welcomed
language
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 for English
students
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 at a British University in England.
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, there are minimal changes in British
students
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' taste in 2000 and 2010. Just under a third of
students
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 were able to speak Spanish in 2000 and a decade later
this
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 number increased modestly to 35.
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Also
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 20 percent of people didn't tend to speak any other languages except their mother tongue in 2000.
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 Spanish,
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 number comprised half of
student
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 majority. Regarding
German
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the German
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language
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 and two other languages, just a tenth of the population had the ability to communicate using
those
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language
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 in 2000. Interestingly,
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 percentage remained unchanged after 10 years. 15
percent
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 preferred to speak French in 2000.
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, the proportion dropped by 5% after ten years.
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