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The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at Queen Mary Hospital since its construction in 1960. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at Queen Mary Hospital since its construction in 1960. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The pictures below illustrate how Queen Mary Hospital's area changed since it was built in 1960.
Firstly
, in 1960, the hospital was located aside
of
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from
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 the main road,
in
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 the right of the shopping centre,
beides
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besides
 that, behind the department, there was
a
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farmland with
the
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a
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 car park nearby,
thus
, the goers could leave their car and wander around.
Secondly
, 20 years later, in 1980, the department was divided into 2 parts,
cancer
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 centre and
pharmacy
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the pharmacy
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 which
was
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were
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 subjoined to the hospital's realm,
furthermore
, the farmland became
nursing
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a nursing
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 school,
nevertheless
, either
car
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 park or the road
were
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 still the same
place
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 as previous.
Thirdly
, at the beginning of
20s
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the 20s
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, the pharmacy and the Queen Mary were unchanged as before,
however
,
the
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cancer
recovering
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recovery
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 place was expanded to displace
nursing
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the nursing
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 school, in parallel, the parking lot was separated
halfly
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half
 and that was where the school was placed.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • initial facilities
  • replacement
  • significant extension
  • absorbed
  • developments
  • introduction
  • adjacent
  • evolution
  • enhancing healthcare services
  • commercial spaces
  • medical facilities
  • expansion
  • modern healthcare needs
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