IELTS Writing Correction Service /
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Band 5.5

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. You recently had a negative experience at a local restaurant. Write a letter to the owner of the restaurant. In your letter, •describe what made your experience negative •describe what would have made the experience better •ask him for an apology and a refund Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows:

#minutes #restaurant #owner #•describe #•ask #apology #refund #addresses
Dear Mossies Management, I am writing to express my
dissapointment
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disappointment
 regarding a recent dining experience at your
restaurant
 on March 12th. It was my and
wife's
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my wife's
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 10th anniversary, and we were very excited to celebrate it at your
restaurant
 as it was recommended by one of my
collegue
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colleague
colleagues
.
However
, our experience fell short of
expectation
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expectations
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. We ordered Cheesy Pasta from the menu, and we were served plain pasta without any seasoning on it. Despite politely requesting a replacement, we met with rudeness from
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one on
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on
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of
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 your staff, Martha who
denied
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refused
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 to replace the dish. Needless to say,
this
 interaction marred our anniversary and our precious time. I kindly request an apology for
disrespectful
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the disrespectful
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 behaviour we encountered at your
restaurant
 and a refund for the
misrepersented
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misrepresented
 dish.
Additionally
, I request you to please train the staff to be polite towards their customers as
this
 impacts the image of the
restaurant
 as well. I look forward to your prompt response and resolution of
this
 matter. Sincerely, Josh
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coherence cohesion
Consider breaking down the paragraphs for a more structured approach. This can enhance the clarity and readability.
task achievement
Ensure to check spelling errors, such as 'misrepersented' should be 'misrepresented' and 'dissapointment' should be 'disappointment'.
task achievement
Clear and polite tone used throughout the letter, which is suitable for the task.
coherence cohesion
Logical structure with a clear beginning, middle, and end.
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