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it's preferable to pay with credit cards instead of cash. do you agree or disagree? give reasons to support your opinion.

#credit #cards #cash #support
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It's preferable to pay with
credit
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 cards
instead
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 of
cash
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, many
people
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 have switched their payment method from
cash
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 to
credit
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card
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, but is it a positive or negative thing? In
this
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essay
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essay,
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 I will talk about
the
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apply
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credit
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Use synonyms
card
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cards
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 and why
people
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 like to pay with
credit
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card
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cards
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instead
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 of
cash
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, well we'll see if it's something bad or good. In the past
people
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was take
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took
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 their own wallet with them
every where
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everywhere
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 they
go
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went
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 and it was hard to keep
money
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 in a safe place,
also
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 it was scary to take a lot of
money
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 with you if you
want
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wanted
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 to go buy something
expansive
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expensive
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 because there is a chance that you will be robbed. But in the current
era
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era,
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 a lot of
people
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 replaced
cash
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 with
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credit
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a credit
show examples
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card
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cards
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 and there
is
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are
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 many reasons for
this
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, first it so easy to take your
credit
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card
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 with you wherever you
will
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apply
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go just you can keep it in your pocket as
a
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apply
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small
card
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money
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 will never change the
card
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 weight whatever it was a few or a lot, in same time
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credit
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a credit
the credit
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card
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 is more secure than
cash
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 since every
card
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 has a password and if
some one
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someone
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 stole your
card
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 you can call the bank and stop the
card
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 easily so it's not easy to get robbed.
Finally
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, the
credit
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card
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 is one of the
most good
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best
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 things
people
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made
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make
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 because it literally helps in different cases,
while
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 it's more secure,
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and more
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more light
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lighter
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 than
cash
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 so it's good to keep your
money
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 in
bank
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the bank
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 and use
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credit
Add an article
a credit
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card
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instead
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 of
cash
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.
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task achievement
Your essay covers the main points of the topic, but it could be more comprehensive. Try to expand on your ideas with more specific examples and thorough explanations.
coherence cohesion
Your essay is generally well-organized, but the transitions between ideas could be smoother. Using linking words and phrases can help improve the flow of your writing.
coherence cohesion
Ensure you have a clear and concise introduction and conclusion. Your introduction should briefly outline your main points, and your conclusion should succinctly summarize these points and restate your position.
task achievement
You have successfully highlighted key points about the security and convenience of credit cards over cash.
coherence cohesion
Your essay generally follows a logical structure with an introduction, body, and conclusion.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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