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the table gives information about the water use in three sectors in six countries.

the table gives information about the water use in three sectors in six countries.
Contained in the table is information
pertainig
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pertaining
 to
the
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water
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 usage in three different sectors in six nations.
Overall
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, agriculture
require
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 the most amount of
water
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 in all six
countries
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whereas
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indistrial
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industrial
 is the lowest. Regarding
water
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 use for households, with 341 m3, Australian homes need more
water
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 than those in any other
contries
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country
. Following is Canada with 279 m3
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water
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 in use. The remaining
countries
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 are varied from 98 m3 to
26m3
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26 m3
 with China residents
require
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 the least. Turning to
industrial
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the industrial
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 sector,
Canda
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Canada
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 stands out the highest with 832 m3
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water
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 in use, the second biggest
water
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 consumer in
this
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 regard is Turkey, with 731 m3.
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 is followed by Australia and the UK with respective figures being 276 m3 and 398 m3. China and Russia need the least amount of
water
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 ranging from 56 m3 to 71 m3. As for agricultural
water
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 consumption, Russia tops the chart, using as much as 1863 m3 of
water
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.Other
countries
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 which used over 1000 m3 of
water
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is
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 Canada and Turkey at 1238 m3 and 1482 respectively.
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, the amount of
water
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 used for agriculture in the other three
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are
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 comparable, ranging
form
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from
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 741 to 810 m3.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, countries, m with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption patterns
  • agricultural sector
  • industrial water use
  • domestic water consumption
  • economic impact
  • environmental impact
  • disparities
  • efficiency
  • sustainability
  • government policies
  • managing
  • regulating
  • regions
  • factors influencing
  • comparative analysis
  • water resources
  • resource management
  • sector-specific use
  • data comparison
  • water scarcity
  • usage trends
  • conservation efforts
  • allocation of resources
  • water footprint
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