The diagrams below show the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes.

The diagrams below show the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes.
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illustrates
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used in the
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cement creating
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steps , and how
cement
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is used to maling concrete for building purposes . Both
cement
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and concrete
production
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are used in structure , we can find it from sand and stones from mounten . Both have several steps to produce the material which can be
stronge
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strong
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material can used
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many purposes for
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building
.
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Bridge
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,
wall
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,
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and foundation
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foundation
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. the
cement
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production
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stages
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it
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start after
buring
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burying
the sand material from
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natural
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have
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mix the limestone and clay together , after that
cruch
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crunch
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it
to
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small
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a small
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,
aterial
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material
called powder
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and
amd
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and
mix it with
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rotating
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heater
then
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sepored
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reported
separated
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a grinder
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to get the final shape for material
cahhed
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cached
'
cement
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that
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it is ready to put
it
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in bags to sell
it
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in the market . the concrete
production
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start
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after
finsh
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finishing
all
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cement
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the cement
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stages and
get
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cement
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, you put 15% from
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with
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10% from water and 25%from sand .
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material
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materials
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together in
concrete
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a concrete
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mixer and mix it , you will get the final
produce
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product
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called ' concrete
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'. Note
: Gravel
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that gravel
is small stones
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • construction
  • cement-making
  • raw materials
  • crushing
  • mixing
  • heating
  • grinding
  • cement powder
  • packaging
  • distribution
  • concrete
  • versatility
  • strength
  • aggregate
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