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The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates the amounts of
fish
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, lamb,
beef
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 and
chicken
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 in a European country from 1979 to 2004.
Chicken
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 has overtaken
beef
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 as the most popular
meat
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 in
this
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 European country, with about 250
grams
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 per person per week in 2004.
Fish
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 experienced a
slightly
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slight
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 decrease, remaining the lowest consumption over 25 years. It’s clear that In 1979,
beef
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has
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had
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 the highest consumption about 220
grams
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.
Beside
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Besides
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 the
amounts
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amount
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 of
fish
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 is less than a quarter of
beef
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 (over 50
grams
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). Lamb and
chicken
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 were eaten
quite
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 similar quantities around 150
grams
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.
However
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, during the 25-year period, the
beef
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 and lamb
witness
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witnessed
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 the same trend, dramatically dropping about 100
grams
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 to 100
grams
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 per person per week and 50
grams
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 respectively. Meanwhile
Chicken
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 was the only
one
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apply
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meat
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saw
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that saw
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an
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the
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 opposite trend, has rapidly
risen
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rose
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 by 100
grams
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,
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and overtook
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overtook
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overtaking
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beef
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 in 1989 as the salable
meat
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.Even though
fish
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 was the less popular
meat
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but
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apply
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the consumption levels were most stable.
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Contractions: Don't use contractions.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words fish, beef, chicken, meat, grams with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amounts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • metric tons
  • fluctuations
  • upward/downward trend
  • stabilize
  • peak
  • trough
  • overtake
  • steady decline/increase
  • sustainable
  • dietary habits
  • preferences
  • health consciousness
  • per capita
  • poultry
  • veal
  • stagnant
  • gradual
  • surpass
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