The charts below show the percentage of males and females who worked in three different sectors in two countries in 2007. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the percentage of males and females who worked in three different sectors in two countries  in 2007.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
As we can see in the Info-Graphic, There are 4 charts that show us men's and women's
percentages
of working in different parts of a
country
. Maximom workers
work
in
services
and minimom are in
agriculture
. The percentage of men is more than women in industries. Agricultures
percentages
are the least in all 4 piecharts. We can see increasing
percentages
in every 4 piecharts from A to B.
Agriculture
's number is at its highest in males in
country
A.
To begin
with, In
country
A, There are 15% of males who
works
Correct subject-verb agreement
work
show examples
in industry, 29% in
agriculture
and 54% in
services
and
percentages
for the females are 8% in industry, 49% in
services
and 42% in
agriculture
.
Moreover
, in
country
B, males
number is
Verb problem
are
show examples
32% of industries, 65 per cent for
services
and three per cent for
agriculture
.
Also
, 11% of women
work
in industries, 49% of them
work
in
services
and only per cent of them
work
in
agriculture
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • employment rates
  • percentage
  • sector
  • comparison
  • male
  • female
  • country
  • evaluation
  • trend
  • proportion
  • data
  • contrast
  • variation
  • labor market
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