The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, devided into three categories, from 1995-2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar graph illustrates the telephone calls in
UK
for Correct article usage
the UK
total
number of Change the article
a total
the total
minutes
(in billions) by dividing Use synonyms
into
three groups, from 1995- 2002.
In 1995 the local-fixed line Correct pronoun usage
them into
is
around 70 Wrong verb form
was
billions
Change to singular
billion
minutes
and gradually Use synonyms
rise
up until 1999 Wrong verb form
rose
about
90 and dropped down Change preposition
to about
more
than 70 in 2002. Change preposition
to more
However
, the National and Linking Words
international-fixed
line Correct your spelling
international fixed
is
around 40 in 1995 and increased Wrong verb form
was
in
slowly Change preposition
apply
about
60 Change preposition
by about
minutes
(billions) in 2002.
Use synonyms
Furthermore
, Linking Words
the
all Mobile calls in 1995 Correct article usage
apply
about
5 Add a missing verb
were about
minutes
, and it Use synonyms
is
not Verb problem
did
increased
over 10 until 1998,had risen up slowly. In 1999 it Wrong verb form
increase
is
more than 10 and in 2000 over 20. Wrong verb form
was
As well as
in 2001 about 40 and in 2002 the mobile calls Linking Words
around
45.
In conclusion, Add a missing verb
were around
in
1995 to 2002 Change preposition
from
the
mobile calls Correct article usage
apply
rise
Wrong verb form
rose
up
gradually.Change preposition
apply
Linking Words
Also
national and international numbers of calls increased, but slower than mobile lines. Add a comma
Also,
Additionally
, the local dropped down but no lower than Linking Words
other
two categories.Correct article usage
the other
Submitted by amalitharangani0Most of villagers are changing their accommodations from villages to cities all around the world. As a result of this countryside residents are lower than town areas.I think this is a negative development and in this essay, I will elaborate my perspectives furthermore.
According to this situation, my take on this is, different of the facilities between the town and the village. As an example, there are lots of shopping centres in the city such as house- hold items, clothes, stationeries, vehicles and so on. Conversely, developed educational centres, schools, hospitals with enough facilities are also at the urban areas. Nevertheless, there are lots of companies and unlimited job opportunities in the city area. Also, mostly there are continuous electricity, gas,water and well planned and punctual transport system as well. So people prefer to live in comfortably and moving to cities as they possible.
Additionally, villagers and town people's have same basic need. Such as food, accommodation, education, good health and freedom as well. In some countries there is unavailable electricity in the countryside. Also, there is poor transport system, teachers and facilities at village schools. Moreover, sometimes not enough medications and human resources. So countryside people preferred to move to town. Finally, countryside population decreased and urbanisation in cities.
In a nutshell, if there is as usual same facilities all over the city and rural areas,as there is lots of freedom in the countryside . My point of view is around the world this point is most prominent in developing countries.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words minutes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "slowly" was used 2 times.
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