The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.  Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The bar chart illustrates the number of males and females from different generations who
do
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some exercise for their
body
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, in Australia, in 2010 .
Overall
,There were different
age
groups from 15 to 65 and over .
According to
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the data
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,
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men
have the highest percentage of all the
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except
the
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age
of 15 to 24 the
women
were the highest . compared with
men
and
women
underage is
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24 the
women
have 52.8 .
While
men
47.7
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from the other side of the graph , the
men
there were almost equal between
men
and
women
under
age
65 and over. The graph shows a slight difference which is just 0.1 percent .
Moreover
, the
age
group of
Age
between
men
and
women
from 25 to 34
men
had 48.4
while
women
had 42.2.
Finally
,
Women
and
men
from 35 to 64 the
men
who did regular physical exercise were more than
Women
.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words age, men, women with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Percentage
  • Australian men
  • Australian women
  • Age groups
  • Regular physical activity
  • Participated
  • Increased
  • Decreased
  • Proportion
  • Physically active
  • Gender difference
  • Engaged
  • Exercise
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