The two bar charts show the proportion of 14-16 year-old students studying a modern foreign language in an English Speaking country and the top three popular foreign languages. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The two bar charts show the proportion of 14-16 year-old students studying a modern foreign language in an English Speaking country and the top three popular foreign languages. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The statistics regarding 14-
16 year-old
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learners acquiring a modern foreign
language
in a country where English is
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official
language
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illustrated
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the languages they chose in 1984 and 2007.
Overall
,
it is clear that
learning a foreign
language
is more common among female students.
In addition
,
it is clear that
Spanish is the least studied
language
. Broadly speaking, the ranking of the studied items remains unchanged in both charts, creating a somewhat steady pattern across the studied years with women participating in
language
learning with French, German and Spanish respectively. Looking into detail, it is obvious that
language
learning saw a general fall in the number of female students from 50% in 1998 to 40% in 2007. The same applies to the percentage of male students whose participation rate experienced a slight fall in 2007. Regarding the languages chosen, the fluctuations are more
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noticeable
with French experiencing a sharp fall from 50% in 1998 to 20% in 2007 the other two languages, German and Spanish,
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by almost 10% in 2007 with German being slightly higher.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • modern foreign languages
  • English-speaking country
  • demographic
  • participation
  • gender disparities
  • trends
  • popularity rankings
  • analyzing
  • implications
  • cultural factors
  • economic ties
  • global job market
  • increasingly globalized
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