You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. Write a letter to your manager. In the letter • Explain why you want to work in the company’s head office for six months • Say how your work could be done while you are away • Ask for his/ her help in arranging it

Dear Mr. Pal, I am writing in connection with requesting to work as a head office in Turkey branch of our company. I am Mahshid. Kargar and nowadays I am working as a business manager at the branch of Iran. Owing to my strong qualifications and experience, I would like to seek your permission to spend 6 months in that country. I think
this
opportunity
can broaden my horizon and
helps
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to be familiar with new methods for managing in business. Having travelled to Turkey, I will choose a suitable alternative person with your approval to be
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of my tasks. I will teach them roles of office, software and
time table
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. before I go to Turkey.
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, I will have
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with them through phone or Internet. I assure each
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would have done
on
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a timely manner. Given the fact that it
opportunity
serve
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me a great deal of benefit and it can be a unique learning
opportunity
.
With your
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approval for arranging
this
opportunity
,
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would assist me with making new communication
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and
expand
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my knowledge. I hope my proposal will not
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any inconvenience.
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sincerely, M. Ka
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that paragraphs are more distinct and single-idea focused.
task achievement
Provide more detail on how your tasks will be managed in your absence to enhance task achievement.
coherence cohesion
Adequate greeting and closing which fits the formal tone of the letter.
task achievement
Polite and professional tone maintained throughout the letter.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • professional development
  • global operations
  • cross-functional
  • remote work
  • progress updates
  • logistical arrangements
  • cultural exchange
  • continuity plan
  • enhance my skillset
  • broaden my horizons
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