The charts below show the mos popular films the genre for men and women and general ticket sales for different types of film in the USA in 2010.

The charts below show the mos popular films the genre for men and women and general ticket sales for different types of film in the USA in 2010.
The charts
illustrates
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the
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information about the
mos
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most
popular
films
the genre for
men
and
women
and general ticket sales for different types of
film
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films
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in the USA in 2010. It was given in two charts; on
one
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hand helps to get detailed information about the main features, on
other
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hand gives
chance
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to make
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comparisons
where relevant.
Overall
, in the bar
chart
films
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genres:
action
,
comedy
,
thriller
, science fiction, western,
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and romantic
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comedy
were categorised
due to
gender. The information which was given in the pie
chart
includes box-office takings in 2010 in
USA
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.
Action
films
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the most popular for 40
men
due to
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,
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just 5
men
prefered
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preferred
watching
romantic
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a romantic
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comedy
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comedies
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. Compared to romantic
comedy
,
comedy
ranked in second with 20
male
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males
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.
Thriller
came in third place in the
chart
,
while
science fiction and western genres headed the next
list
with the same popularity, 10
men
. Compared to the
men
, romantic
comedy
was
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top of the
list
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its idolization for the 30
women
.
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films
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on average, so it came on the second
list
for
women
. Science fiction was lower than the
thriller
,
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were 5 and 10
women
, respectively. Western
films
were
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same range for both males and females.
Action
is the most viewed by
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the
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film
lovers
due to
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piechart
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, containing two-fifths, as opposed to
thriller
, which was
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the
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one
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of the lists.
Comedy
is the most regarded
than
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romantic
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comedy
.
Comedy
and romantic
comedy
headed 24 and 12 per cent, in turn. On the dip of the
chart
ranked other
film
genres with one in twenty.
Action
films
controlled the top
list
not only for
the
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men
,
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but
also
for
the
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other
film
lovers.
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