The chart gives information about the percentage of overweight men and women in Australia from 1980 to 2010.

The bar chart below highlights the number of Australian people being overweight, classified by gender during the period between 1980 and 2010. A glance at the bar chart provided reveals that, there were more obese men than women. Their overweight rate exceeded year by year.

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females did not have a considerable figure of increasing ratio. But,

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a minimal increase only per year. To be more detailed, in 1980, under 50% of men in Australia were fat compared to only 30% of females. After 10 years,

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a plethora of males climbed slightly to over 50%, females witnessed a remarkable growth to 40%. In

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2000, it can be seen that a good deal of

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population

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suffering from obesity. The proportion of the former rose and reached a peak of 70%. Afterwards, it remained stable until 2010.

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, the amount of the latter

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escalated by 10% in 2000 and maintained the same level for 10 years.