The pie charts below show the comparison of different kinds of energy production of France in two years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main feature, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts below show the comparison of different kinds of energy production of France in two years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main feature, and make comparisons where relevant.
These two pie
charts
provide a Comparison of
Energy
Production in France. Both pie
charts
link between years and comparison of multiple sources of
Energy
.
According to
the
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both
charts
consumption
of gas in 2005 was bigger than
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consumption
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in 1995. It can clearly seen that petro
consumption
has declined by about 10% in 10 years.
Also
, gas
consumption
rose by about 1.3%.
Furthermore
, coal
also
increased 2%.
While
Nuclear boomed to 10.10%. As same, the other source of
energy
has rais to 9.10%. Regarding the given data, it is remarkable that there is a leap in the process of finding other sources of
energy
that are friendly to
environment
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and that
for
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earth
sick
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. The lowest point of consuming
energy
was other resources which reached 4.9% in 1995. In reference to both pie
charts
, to noticeable
figures
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there is a great movement to use another type of
energy
to help the environment by reducing gas.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words charts, energy, consumption with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "comparison" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "comparison" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.

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