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The chart below show percentages of water used in different sectors in Sydney,Australia in 1997 and 2007.

The chart below show percentages of water used in different sectors in Sydney,Australia in 1997 and 2007.
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The pie chart compares data on the percentage of
water
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 ,which was utilized in diverse areas in
Sydney
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 and
Australia
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 in 1997 and 2007.
Overall
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, it's obvious that in the two
countries
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countries,
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water
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 was used mainly for the food
industry
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 and household use at different times.
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, there were smaller proportions of uses of the building
industry
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 in both of them.
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, the usage of it for the service
industry
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 in
Sydney
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 doubled the figure for
Australia
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. Consumers of
water
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 in 1997
Sydney
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, the greatest proportion of use was in the food
industry
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, which represented 48% of the total expenditure,
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 in
Australia
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, the figure for
this
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 category was just 41%.
Sydney
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 users operate the
water
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 for manufacturing ,at 15%. Meanwhile, in 2007,
Australia
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's people spent 11% of
water
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also
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 for production. In terms of household use, the percentages of expenses for
water
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 were relatively similar at 21% for
Australia
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, and 19% for
Sydney
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. In each of these countries, the smallest fragment of utilizing
water
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in
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 the building
industry
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.
Nonetheless
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, the figures were exactly doubled in
Sydney
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, which were 5% and 2% respectively.In
Australia
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, the service
industry
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 experienced in using
water
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 for it at 13%,
however
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, it accounted for 25% of the total
industry
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 which was serviced in
Sydney
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, sydney, australia, industry with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 2 times.
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