Some people prefer to eat meals at restaurants, while others like to prepare and eat food in their own home. Which do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

There is a trend these days for some people to eat from hotels
whereas
many others enjoy their home meals.
Although
hoteling has some attraction for a huge gathering with prospects for socialization and entertainment, I personally prefer home-made items because of their peculiar taste and hygiene. On the one hand, there are some merits of eating from outside.One of the main benefits is the enjoyment that comes with dining at luxurious
food
outlets.Many eateries provide opportunities for fun activities
beside
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meals.
For instance
, in Centaurus Mall in Islamabad, the
food
corner is on the third floor, where different games are available for kids and adults
thus
encouraging people to eat and enjoy at the same time.Another
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positive
aspect is that a large get-together is possible only at a restaurant which allows people to interact without bothering
for
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the
food
preparation and service.
On the other hand
,many folks have a taste for home-cooked dishes.
This
is
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because
becasue
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because
their taste buds are accustomed to special
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recipes
recepies
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recipes
made at home.
Home-cooking
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enables individuals
manage
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spices
according to
their own
choice
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choices
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.
For instance
, I love special
baryani
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biryani
made by my wife and would refuse any offer to go to
party
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a party
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once I know that
this
delecious
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delicious
dish is made in my house.
Moreover
, there are chances of getting ill by eating from
food
points because hygiene cannot be ensured at those places like it is done
while
cooking at our own villa.To give an example, many of my colleagues suffered from gastroenteritis
last
month after eating
fast-
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fast food
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food
from the market. In conclusion,
although
dining at restaurants is liked by some for the sake of social interaction and amusement
but
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I believe that self-made items are more tasty and
also
prevent us from catching a disease.
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