The charts below show the proposition of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010.
The pie chart
comparaes
the percentages of British Correct your spelling
compares
student
at one college in England Fix the agreement mistake
students
which
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in which
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speak different languages Change the modal
can
furthermore
with their original language between
one decade.
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was
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apply
in
2010 just 5% Change preposition
by
in addition
it was higher numbers in 2010 in contrast
in 2000 the no onther
language Correct your spelling
other
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dropped to double in the year 2010. Unnecessary verb
apply
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of Correct your spelling
percentage
two
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the two
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languages stood Correct your spelling
other
the
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2010,
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to accounted
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accounting
another
language was 15 per cent Correct quantifier usage
other
while
in 2010 was 20 %.
In 2000 The
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they
were able Correct pronoun usage
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speak
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only 15 Capitalize word
French
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portion
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