The charts below show the proposition of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010.

The charts below show the proposition of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010.
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compares
the percentages of British
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students
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at one college in England
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they
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speak different languages
furthermore
with their original language
between
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one decade.
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the highest percentages in both segments
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increased
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2010 just 5%
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other
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dropped to double in the year 2010.
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of
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other
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same proportion exactly.
also
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it is clear that
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level
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for 10% . during 2000 the
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language was 15 per cent
while
in 2010 was 20 %. In 2000
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British students
they
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were able
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french
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only 15
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portion
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