The chart below show percentage of water used in different sectors in Sydney, Australia in 1997 and 2007.

The chart below show percentage of water used in different sectors in Sydney, Australia in 1997 and 2007.
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The pie chart data on the rate of total
water
usage in the 1997 and 2007 years in Sydney.
Overall
, in 1997,
while
the spending of
water
on the food
industry
, manufacturing and building
industry
decreased in
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2007
year
, the percentage of service
industry
and household use have
on the contrary
increased.
To begin
with the food
industry
, where there was the biggest percentage of
water
usage, in 1997, it was 48%, which in 2007
year
became 41%. In manufacturing sphere, there was 15% in the 1997
year
,
however
, in the 2007
year
, it decreased to 11%. And regarding building works, in the 2007
year
it was only 2%,
although
in the 1997
year
was 5%.
Then
in the service
industry
, in 2007 people spent 25% on
water
, in spite of in 1997 they spent only 13%. Regarding households, in
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1997
year
,
water
usage in
this
part was only 19 per cent, but
nevertheless
, as we can see,
this
number increased to exactly 21 per cent.
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  • water consumption
  • percent
  • sector
  • domestic
  • industrial
  • agriculture
  • comparison
  • trends
  • decrease
  • increase
  • significant
  • resource management
  • sustainability
  • efficiency
  • conservation
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