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The chart below shows the value of one countries exports in various categories during 2015 in 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.

The chart below shows the value of one countries exports in various categories during 2015 in 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.
This
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 chart compares the costs of exports   in one country in different kinds of categories in the two
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year
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years
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 2015 and 2016. The table demonstrates the proportion changes
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 exports in every category between 2015 and 2016.
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, the general trends for all categories witnessed an upward trend, except for gems and jewellery during
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year
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.
In particular
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, petroleum
products
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 and engineered goods always had
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 highest amount of money in two years. Looking at the details, the highest amount of money belonged to petroleum
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, at over 60
billion
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dollars
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, and engineered
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goods
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, at around 55
billion
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dollars
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 in 2015. After a
year
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, they both increased to more than 60
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dollars
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 in 2016. The price of Agricultural
products
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 did not
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 significantly, at over 30
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dollars
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. In 2015, Textiles had nearly 25
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dollars
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, after
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 it grew moderately to over 30
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dollars
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 in the next
year
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. Different from these, gems and jewellery witnessed a slight decrease. If we look at
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the percentages
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 of exports, we can see that Textiles had
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more  growth than others, at 15,24%.
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, Agricultural
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the lowest
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 percentage of 0,81%.
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, we can see a reduction of 5,18% in gems and jewellery during
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 period.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words year, products, billion, dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • export categories
  • percentage change
  • economic implications
  • GDP (Gross Domestic Product)
  • fluctuations
  • international trade relationships
  • top-performing categories
  • least performing categories
  • export values
  • global market trends
  • export priorities
  • economic strategies
  • future prospects
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