The charts below show the average percentages in typicl meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant
The charts illustrate the average proportion of three different types of nutrients in the meals which may
causes
health problems from eating too much.
The general overview is that the meal that Change the verb form
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sodium
and saturated fat ratio among all the meals is the dinner whereas
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snacks
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It can be seen that the dinner meal is
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sodium
, followed by the
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sugar
with the figures being 37% and 23% respectively. Next,
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the
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sodium
in a lunch meal is occupied by 29%, the
saturated fat with 26% and Correct article usage
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the
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sugar
with 19%. Moving on to the first meal of the day, breakfast, containing
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the
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Additionally
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