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The graph below shows the change in production (Million Tonnes) of three products in the forest industry in a European country.

The graph below shows the change in production (Million Tonnes) of three products in the forest industry in a European country.
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The line graph depicts the change in manufacturing of three various
products
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 in the forest industry in a European region from 1990 to 2000. It is clear from the graph that the amount of paper
products
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 dominated compared to other
products
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while
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 the equivalent figure for the pulp creation ranked the lowest over the period shown.
According to
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 what is shown, in 1980 the Paper
product
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 saw a clear upward trend compared with other
products
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 In 1980 the forest industry produced the fewest amount of pulp with a figure of about 4
million
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 in the following year there was a reduction in the amount of pulp
product
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then
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 remained stable in 2000.
On the other hand
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, in 1980 the timber
product
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 reached 4
million
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.
Afterwards
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 the quantity of timber
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product
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products
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pecked
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peaked
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 at 8
million
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then
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 sharply declined to 6
million
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 in the following year. After that, returned to the highest with a figure of about 8
million
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 in 2000.
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