the chart below shows the percentage of river water in UK rivers that is classified as having good chemical quality between 1990 and 2002.

the chart below shows the percentage of river water in UK rivers that is classified as having good chemical quality between 1990 and 2002.
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consists
consits
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consists
of the title "River
water
quality
in the UK" illustrating the percentage of river
water
with good chemical
quality
from 1990 to 2002 across four regions:
Northen
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Northern
Ireland
,
England
,
Wales
and
Scotland
Overall
, there
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a considerable variation in the figure for
England
and
Scotland
. Meanwhile, the percentage of
Wales
and Nothern
Ireland
stayed unchanged most of the period, until the year 1998,
tha
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the
data for Nothern
Ireland
reached the peak of the chart. Starting with 45% in the year 1990, the proportion of
water
quality
in
England
increased steadily. Until 1996, the figure for
water
quality
in
England
reached the peak at approximately 70%, after
that
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witnessed a significant drop from nearly 70% to exactly 20%. Meanwhile, the percentage of river
water
in
Scotland
having good chemical
quality
was only half as much as the figure for
England
at about 21%, after which it
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remained unchanged in the next six
years
(at 30%).
However
, there was
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increase from 30% to 50% in 2002, surpassing the data for
England
.
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However
, another surpassing point
occured
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occurred
occurs
between the year 2000 and 2002,
while
the number of good chemical
quality
rivers in
England
rose quickly from 20% to 50%, the data for
Scotland
experienced a rapid fall
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20% in the
last
2
years
.
On the other hand
, the proportion of
water
quality
in
Wales
and Northern
Ireland
reached a plateau of 95% and 85% respectively in the first
eitght
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eight
years
. In the following
years
,
Wales
witnessed a sudden drop to 80%,
while
Nothern
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Ireland
climbed to 95% in 2000
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maintanced
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maintenance
maintained
that value until the end of the period.
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