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The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisions where relevant.

The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisions where relevant.
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The charts illustrate the career prospects of
graduate
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 and postgraduate British
students
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 in the year 2008, excluding full-time jobs.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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while
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 their tendency was mostly towards studying
further
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, they were less likely to participate in voluntary work, regardless of their educational levels.
In addition
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, the number of
graduate
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students
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 being engaged in an occupation after college was enormously higher. Focusing on
graduate
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students
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, a great urge to pursue their studies
further
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 is noticeable with an estimated number of 30,000
students
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.
Moreover
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, Part-time occupations take the second place with just above 17,000
students
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, followed by being unemployed in the third place with nearly 16,000 pupils. Meanwhile,
graduate
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 pupils showcased a low passion for voluntary work as only 3,500 of them went after them. In terms of postgraduate ones, continuing their education was still the leader, consisting of 2,725
students
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.
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, 2,535
students
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 went after part-time jobs, making it the second famous option.
However
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, postgraduate
students
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 had a considerably lower tendency towards being unemployed and doing voluntary jobs with nearly 1,600 and 350
students
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, respectively. Comparing the charts, it is obvious that
graduate
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students
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 were more eager to take up a job after college in the same year with a difference of approximately 1000-20000
students
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "further".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words graduate, students with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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