The charts show the age at which people left full-time education as well as the average salary they were making two years after entering the workforce. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts show the age at which people left full-time education as well as the average salary they were making two years after entering the workforce.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graphs illustrate the
years
in which
people
left full-time education and the
salary
they earned two
years
after starting work. In general, the
age
at which most stopped working full time was between 19 and 21
years
old, and the average
salary
they received was approximately 24
thousand
at the
age
of 22 to 24
years
. Of the
people
who abandoned full-time education, the highest proportion was between 19 to 21
years
old, followed by the group of
people
from 22 to 24
years
old and in a very similar proportion was the group of
people
from 16 to 18
years
old
years
.
However
, only a small minority was 3%, which corresponds to
ages
before 16
years
. Another important factor that must be taken into account is the
salary
between
ages
, the
salary
with the highest
salary
was that of those between the
ages
of 22 and 24 with an average of $24
thousand
, and those under 16
years
old earned 17
thousand
dollars. In comparison,
although
the
age
that abandoned full-time studies the fastest was 19 to 21
years
old, it was not the one that earned the most,
although
its average is $22
thousand
; and the one who earned the most $24
thousand
was the second to abandon her full-time studies, which was between the
ages
of 22 and 24. and the
age
that represents less than before 16
years
, it was observed that he had less income in his
salary
of less than $16
thousand
.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words years, people, salary, age, thousand, ages with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • full-time education
  • average salary
  • workforce
  • correlation
  • patterns
  • economic factors
  • social factors
  • educational factors
  • age groups
  • data analysis
  • main features
  • comparisons
  • summarise
  • trend
  • policy implications
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