The charts show the age at which people left full-time education as well as the average salary they were making two years after entering the workforce. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts show the age at which people left full-time education as well as the average salary they were making two years after entering the workforce.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graphs illustrate the
years
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in which
people
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left full-time education and the
salary
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they earned two
years
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after starting work. In general, the
age
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at which most stopped working full time was between 19 and 21
years
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old, and the average
salary
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they received was approximately 24
thousand
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at the
age
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of 22 to 24
years
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. Of the
people
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who abandoned full-time education, the highest proportion was between 19 to 21
years
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old, followed by the group of
people
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from 22 to 24
years
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old and in a very similar proportion was the group of
people
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from 16 to 18
years
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old
years
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.
However
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, only a small minority was 3%, which corresponds to
ages
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before 16
years
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. Another important factor that must be taken into account is the
salary
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between
ages
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, the
salary
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with the highest
salary
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was that of those between the
ages
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of 22 and 24 with an average of $24
thousand
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, and those under 16
years
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old earned 17
thousand
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dollars. In comparison,
although
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the
age
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that abandoned full-time studies the fastest was 19 to 21
years
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old, it was not the one that earned the most,
although
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its average is $22
thousand
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; and the one who earned the most $24
thousand
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was the second to abandon her full-time studies, which was between the
ages
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of 22 and 24. and the
age
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that represents less than before 16
years
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, it was observed that he had less income in his
salary
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of less than $16
thousand
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "although".
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words years, people, salary, age, thousand, ages with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • full-time education
  • average salary
  • workforce
  • correlation
  • patterns
  • economic factors
  • social factors
  • educational factors
  • age groups
  • data analysis
  • main features
  • comparisons
  • summarise
  • trend
  • policy implications
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