This graph below gives information from a 2008 report about consumption energy in the USA since 1980 with projections until 2030. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant

This graph below gives information from a 2008 report about consumption energy in the USA since 1980 with projections until 2030. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant
The graph illustrates how the energy was consumed in the USA from 1980 to 2030.
Overall
,
it is clear that
Petrol
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the Petrol
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and Oil
units
were the absolute leaders in
this
matter.
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In Additionall
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Additionall
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Additionally
, Hydropower fuel was consumed the
lowest
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most
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for energy generation. Focusing on before implementing projections, Petrol and Oil were the dominant fuels in the matter of energy consumption with approximately 35 to 40 quadrillion
units
. In terms of Coal and Natural gas resources,
while
taking
the
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second place, both had a gradual increment from roughly 15 to well above 25
units
. Meanwhile, Nuclear, Solar or wind, and Hydropower fuels were
least
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the least
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consumed as they all
strarted
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started
just above 5
units
and
reaching
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reached
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a quadrillion of nearly 8
units
for the former, and 5 for the two laters. Moving on to after the projection
implemention
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implementation
, which is
2015
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to 2030, Petrol and Oil witnessed a significant surge to 50
units
.
Additionally
,
while
both coal resources continued increasing,
finally
surpassed Natural
gas's
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gas
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, and reached
its
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their
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peak at 30
units
in the
last
year. The
last
three fuels,
however
, plateaued between 5 to 10
units
per year.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last, while".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words units with synonyms.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • energy consumption
  • trends
  • projected
  • dominant source
  • slight fluctuations
  • steady increase
  • gradual increase
  • renewable sources
  • positive growth trend
  • fossil fuels
  • energy mix
  • significant contributors
  • share
  • projections
  • hydroelectric power
  • solar/wind energy
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