The charts below show the percentages of men and women aged 60-64 in employment in four countries in 1970 and 2000 Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The charts below show the percentages of men and women aged 60-64 in employment in four countries in 1970 and 2000 Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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The bar chart illustrates the level of males and females who were in the 60-64 age group and were working in Australia, Japan, the USA and Belgium in 1970 and 2000. As it might be concluded from the data, in 1970, males in their senior age worked more than
women
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in all states mentioned below.
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, the difference between men and
women
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varied from country to country.
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, in Japan, the divergence between males and females was quite slight, but the diametrically opposite situation may be noticed in Belgium.
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, in 2010, everything altered.
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, the percentage of elderly workers plunged and stabilized and,
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, the difference was not
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drastic as it used to be. Delving into more details of the chart, it is clearly noticeable that in 1970 the percentage of workers in the age gap between 60-64 was way more tangible than in 2010.
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, in Australia, 47% for
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and 74% for men
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19% for
women
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and 18 to men and
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a tendency was relevant for all 4 countries.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "such".
Vocabulary: Replace the words women with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Employment rate
  • Percentage
  • Significant increase/decrease
  • Fluctuation
  • Gender disparity
  • Trend
  • Decline
  • Improvement
  • Variation
  • Noteworthy
  • Aligned
  • Comparative analysis
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