The charts below show the percentage of their food budget the average family spent on restaurant meals in different years. The graph shows the average number of meals eaten in fast-food restaurants and sit-down restaurants per family. Summarize1 the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make compari sons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The charts below show the percentage of their food budget the average family spent on restaurant meals in different years. The graph shows the average number of meals eaten in fast-food restaurants and sit-down restaurants per family. Summarize1 the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make compari sons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
The pie charts illustrate the amount of budget that people usually spend on
restaurant
meals
and home cooking,
while
the line graph
compared
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compares
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the number of
meals
in two different
typed
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types
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of
foods
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food
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from 1970 to 2000.
Overall
, it can be seen obviously that there
were
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was
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partial
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a partial
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proportion in both
restaurant
and home
food
, in 2000.
Additionally
, Fast
food
meals
and
Restaurant
meals
experienced an upward trend throughout the period.
According to
the pie charts, there
were
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was
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only 10% of
food
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the food
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budget for
restaurant's
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restaurant
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meals
, before the number
increasing
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increased
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continually to 15%, 35% ,
untill
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until
50%
at the end
of the period.
However
, the money
spending
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spent
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on home cooking
food
decreased significantly from 90% in 1970 to 65% in 1990,
then
dropped to 50%
in
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apply
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ten years later, which reached the same percentage
with
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as
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the
another
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other
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one. Turning to the line graph, fast
food
started at 20
meals
per year in the beginning
then
dradually
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gradually
climbed up to around 25
meals
in the following decade.
Afterward
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,
this
number went up sharply to 85
meals
approximately
in
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apply
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20 years later, resulting in the highest
meals
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number of meals
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in
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apply
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annual
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annually
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of all.
Furthermore
,
sitdown
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sit-down
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restaurant
meals
accounted for 20
meals
in the first year, before rising steeply to around 45
meals
per
years
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year
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at the end
of the period.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end".
Vocabulary: Replace the words restaurant, meals, food with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.

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