the chart below show percentages of water used in different sectures in Sydney, Australia in 1997 and 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting features, and make comparisons where relevant.

the chart below show percentages of water used in different sectures in Sydney, Australia in 1997 and 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie chart data on a diagram of
percentage
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the percentage
a percentage
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of
water
users in Sydney, the capital of Australia between 1997 and 2007 years.
Overall
,
while
using
water
for food, buildings and manufacturing has decreased, in other spheres like service and household use has increased. The greatest proportion of
using
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water
in 1997 was for the food industry, which decreased in 2007 from 48 per
cent
to 41 per
cent
,
while
the figure for the category of household use increased from 19 per
cent
to 21.
Water
used for manufacturing which is followed by a diagram accounted that in between
this
period it has almost stayed without changes or was relatively similar. In 1997 year it was about 15 per
cent
followed by a small decrease in 2007 to 11 per
cent
. Next is the service industry which was approximately 13 per
cent
in the 1997 year, and it increased to 25 per
cent
in 2007. The diagram shows that
Water
has been used slightly lower for building industries. In 1997 it was only 5 per
cent
, which in 2007 decreased to just 2 per
cent
.
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