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of residents claim that all higher education pupils ought to learn the faculty

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to their preference.

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that these teenagers just need to concentrate on

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that can be indispensable in the future, namely science and technology.

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the aspects they like can reinforce the sense of motivation.

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, these young generations can contribute advanced polls to the subjects they like which leads to

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area.

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, Bill Gates became

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devices,

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person to the

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distinguished one in the

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site of the global.

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a success. If the pupils only focus on particular areas, they can balance

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time schedule in both studying and

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in order to gain a chunk of

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to the prevalent subjects and increase a portion of being successful.

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introduction conclusion

Work on developing a clear introduction and conclusion to give your essay a complete structure. This will help in presenting your arguments more cohesively.

logical structure

Improve the logical structure of your essay by ensuring each paragraph flows logically from one to the next. Use connectors and transitional phrases more effectively.

clear comprehensive ideas

Provide more comprehensive and clear ideas to strengthen your arguments. Ensure that your points are well-articulated and easy to follow.

complete response

You have shown a good attempt to discuss both views, which is essential for this task.

relevant specific examples

The example of Bill Gates adds a relevant and specific point to your argument, showcasing the importance of studying what one likes.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

226 words

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