The chart and table show working hour and salary for 4 different occupationa. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main feature, and make comparison where relevant.
While
the table provides information on the annual salaries of four main professions including Fire service
, Police
service
, Nurses
, and Teachers, the bar chart reveals their hours
of woking
per week. Correct your spelling
working
Overall
, although
it is evdient
that Correct your spelling
evident
Police
Correct article usage
the Police
service
receives the highest salary compared to other jobs, Nurses
work
more then
them with a difference of 30 Replace the word
than
hours
.
Police
service
receives receives
52 Remove the redundancy
apply
dollars
with 35 hours
. Following it, Fire service
who get paid 48,700 dollars
with nearly 40 hours
of work
. Then
nurses
come at
the third place where they receive 37 Change preposition
to
dollars
for work
approximately 55 hours
. At least, teachers who works
only 30 Change the verb form
work
hours
and
receive 33 Correct word choice
apply
dollars
, cosidering
it the lowest working Correct your spelling
considering
hours
per week and the least paied
job.
Correct your spelling
paid
To sum up
, police
service
receives the highest income with only relatively 35 hours
of work
per week and Nurses
work
for 55 hours
cosidering
it to be the highest working Correct your spelling
considering
hours
with a difference of 30 hours
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words service, police, nurses, hours, work, dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
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