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The chart and table show working hour and salary for 4 different occupationa. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main feature, and make comparison where relevant.

The chart and table show working hour and salary for 4 different occupationa. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main feature, and make comparison where relevant.
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 the table provides information on the annual salaries of four main professions including Fire
service
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,
Police
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service
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,
Nurses
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, and Teachers, the bar chart reveals their
hours
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 of
woking
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working
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 per week.
Overall
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,
although
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 it is
evdient
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evident
 that
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Police
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the Police
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service
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 receives the highest salary compared to other jobs,
Nurses
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work
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then
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than
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 them with a difference of 30
hours
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.
Police
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service
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 receives
receives
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apply
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52
dollars
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 with 35
hours
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. Following it, Fire
service
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 who get paid 48,700
dollars
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 with nearly 40
hours
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 of
work
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.
Then
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nurses
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 come
at
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to
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 the third place where they receive 37
dollars
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 for
work
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 approximately 55
hours
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. At least, teachers who
works
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work
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 only 30
hours
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and
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apply
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receive 33
dollars
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,
cosidering
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considering
 it the lowest working
hours
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 per week and the least
paied
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paid
 job.
To sum up
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,
police
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service
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 receives the highest income with only relatively 35
hours
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 of
work
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 per week and
Nurses
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work
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 for 55
hours
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cosidering
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considering
 it to be the highest working
hours
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 with a difference of 30
hours
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words service, police, nurses, hours, work, dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Occupations
  • Salaries
  • Working hours
  • Average
  • Annual
  • Comparison
  • Discrepancies
  • Professions
  • Doctors
  • Teachers
  • Engineers
  • Retail workers
  • Balanced
  • High-paying
  • Low-paying
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